1. Taylor-Jayne said I used all of my sources well and I spread them out in my paper in a good way.
Brandon encouraged I incorporate more of my words in my paper so that I could help the conversation flow more.
Rhett added that I should add more personal experience to my paper which would make it stronger and more relatable.
Jared included that I should add more to the setting part. He said more detail will help the readers get an understanding for the introduction to the script and will orient the readers.
2. The most helpful piece of advice I received was to incorporate more of a personal experience to my paper. This is helpful because I didn't really put any personal experience in the draft and I feel like this addition will help the readers understand the different learning styles better.
3. The least helpful piece of advice I received was to include more of a setting because I felt like I built a good introduction setting. The readers can understand the setting from my introduction but I will probably add more in-depth details to enhance it.
4. My plans for revision include editing the introduction/setting and adding a few more details to make it more personable. I will also add the subcategories of kinesthetic learning after Leopold's part on the second page. I will enhance a couple sentences that didn't make much sense the first time I wrote the paper. To get to 5 pages, I will add more about personal experiences and testing for each learning type.
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