Workshop reflection 2|25

1. Feedback from individual classmates
Brandon- suggested scattering my questions throughout my paragraphs instead of just at the end. He gave me another example in the "Liberal Education" excerpt to use in that paragraph for more support. He said I had a strong introduction that was clear.
Taylor-Jayne-  Suggested I put questions at the end of each point I make and it will help scatter the questions throughout my paper. Said my questions were good because they can't be answered. Said I had a strong introduction that was an "attention getter."
Rhett- Suggested I change the beginning of my 2nd paragraph and add "this article written by" so my readers don't get confused when I jump into the article they don't know about. He also helped clear things up with citing errors.

2. Most helpful
The most helpful piece of advice was giving me another example from the Liberal Education excerpt because that was the paragraph where I needed more examples of how the author is saying that group work effects children. They offered I use the sentence that focuses on "a specific area of interest" in the handout. Brandon gave me the idea that people with the same interests tend to work together and help each other. This can support my claim even further.

3. Least helpful
I don't believe there was a piece of advice that was least helpful because every suggestion I received can better my paper. Grammatical changes, context changes, and idea suggestions all helped equally and have given me a basis for how I can revise my paper.

4. Plans for revision
I plan on adding "this article written by" after the first word in my second paragraph to let my readers know that I am referring to an article I read that was written by Montessori. I plan on adding another example from the Liberal Education handout in my 3rd paragraph. The author talks about specific areas of education and I plan on using this to further my point that the author thinks group work is best considering people of the same interests tend to work in groups. I plan to integrate my questions within my paragraphs when I support a point that relates to that question.